Possible spelling mistake. 'revolutionised' is British English.revolutionized
revolutionisedThis words can be replaced with:a number of
someThis words can be replaced with:willshallbe going to
shouldThis words can be replaced with:willshallbe going to
shouldThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
endThis words can be replaced with:willshallbe going to
shouldFirstly
, freedom to talk on Mobile phones is a basic right of every individual. Authorities can guide the person about This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :requirements
rulesThis words can be replaced with:on the contrary
butSecondly
, there are number of situations, where it is necessary to talk on cell phones. For instance
, where both the parents are Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).working, and
working andThis words can be replaced with:ought to
have toThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approacharrive
comespecially
to concentrate on their studies like libraries and This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :coursetraining
classusually
busy in doing their work, talking on a mobile in loud volume could distract people from their studies and work. In order to, This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
makeThis words can be replaced with:willshallbe going to
shouldbe banned
. In my opinion, there This words can be replaced with:willshallbe going to
shouldThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :requirements
rulesThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
useThis words can be replaced with:on the contrary
ButThis words can be replaced with:willshallbe going to
shouldtotally
prohibited. For example
, if anybody is having Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'an
aThis words can be replaced with:willshallbe going to
shouldDid you mean "outside"?outside
out sideThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
useIn conclusion
, both views points have its valid points This words can be replaced with:on the contrary
butPossible spelling mistake. 'organisations' is British English.organizations
organisationsThis words can be replaced with:willshallbe going to
shouldThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
makeThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
useDon't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "area"?area
areas5.5
Total Band
5
Coherence and Cohesion
5
Lexical Resource
5.5
Grammatical Range
5.5
Task Achievement