The presented graph the population proportion of elderly .
There are three countries of which this graph
Looking at the graph, USA and Sweden of the elderly
was fluctuating. when we look at the Japan's population, it
the least of all other countries and it will
near future.
the data, USA and Sweden approximately between 5%
and 10% and had a same general path along approximately in 1990
the proportion to 15% and approximately 14%
years 1940 to 1990 approximately.
After 1990, Japan had a respectable climb in elderly citizens around
5% in 2000, and in the near future it can have a drastic climb about
20% making it to 25% and will be the highest in elderly population
if compared to USA and Sweden. USA had a fall in 2000 which
negligible and it can increase
(around 23%). And
climbed after 2000 to 20%, again will to 17% approximately
and then it will climb it to the second highest in these three
.
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.Looking at the graph, USA and Sweden
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startedand 10% and had a same general path along approximately in 1990
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.On the other hand
Japan had a fall from 5% to almost 2% between theyears 1940 to 1990 approximately.
After 1990, Japan had a respectable climb in elderly citizens around
5% in 2000, and in the near future it can have a drastic climb about
20% making it to 25% and will be the highest in elderly population
if compared to USA and Sweden. USA had a fall in 2000 which
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almostalso
climb with a Non-standard use of the comparative or superlative. Did you mean "less steep"?less steep
less steeper(around 23%). And
finally
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whichclimbed after 2000 to 20%, again will
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decreasedand then it will climb it to
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countries5.5
Total Band
5.5
Coherence and Cohesion
5
Lexical Resource
5.5
Grammatical Range
5.5
Task Achievement