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Employment Estimated from the USA, which Farming, Fishing and Forecasting shown
The Farming, Fishing and Forecasting had grown about 75%, in the year of 1930 which is the highest amount of working area among other. plunged to 60%
In The Meantime, the Technical and Industrial percentage of workers the 1970. From this point, it surges to large Employees approximately 40%, towards the end. All the while the Other services
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LabourThis words can be replaced with:various
differentparticularly
in the USA in Five Areas from 1930 to 2010, respectively
.Overall
, In the Ten-year of various Developments of This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
peoplesignificantly
declined, when compared to the Industrial Site had Use the past participle "risen" after the modal (auxiliary) verb 'had'.risen
rosesharply
from the fallen point of Agriculture within the Five Sector by the end of the year, 2010.The Farming, Fishing and Forecasting had grown about 75%, in the year of 1930 which is the highest amount of working area among other
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datasHowever
, during in 1970, it This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :embarked on the proccess of
startedgradually
by 5%, which at the end period, reached below the measuring unit of Job Seekers in the United States.In The Meantime, the Technical and Industrial
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10% were relatively
Stable between each ten years.
5.5
Total Band
5.5
Coherence and Cohesion
5.5
Lexical Resource
6
Grammatical Range
5.5
Task Achievement