Generally
, elderly people are leaders and directors of a company however
a handful of people believe that it is better to have a young leader. I strongly
This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
agreeUse "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'an
aPossible spelling mistake. 'organisation' is British English.organization
organisationThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :interpret
explainThe predominant justification to support my viewpoint is that elder people have a
This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :benefitialproduct
goodis needed
to tackle the situation according to his past experience. At such situations, older people play a very significant role as they have wide experience than those who are young. To exemplify, In India almost all the companies are headed
by older people as they have This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :benefitialproduct
goodalso
faced This words can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
manyUse a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).their, and
their andThus
, this could alleviate This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :evil
badThis word is normally spelled with hyphen.decision-making
decision makingThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
companyFurthermore
, Older people are very responsible unlike younger people. Older people take the accountability of all the aspects related to business that This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createsconstructsmanufacturesproduces
makesMoreover
, elder people This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
thinkcalmly
that younger people lack in. For Instance
, Possible spelling mistake found.SatanRattanRutanRa tanRat an
RatanThis words can be replaced with:frequently
oftenThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
makealso
its revenue.In conclusion
, although This words can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
manystrongly
oppose it as older people can This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :aidassistsupport
helpPossible spelling mistake found.experience
experincePossible spelling mistake found.responsibility
responsibiltyPossible spelling mistake found.ability
abiltyThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
thinkcalmly
.
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Total Band
6.5
Coherence and Cohesion
5
Lexical Resource
6.5
Grammatical Range
6.5
Task Achievement