This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :resides
livesThis words can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
manyThis words can be replaced with:a number of
someTherefore
, I strongly
This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
agreelinearly
aimed at younger generations This words can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
becauseAdmittedly
, there are numerous points to support my view. To This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiatecommence
beginIn other words
, This words can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
manyThis words can be replaced with:quickrapidswiftprompt
fastmostly
unhealthy products to children every year. For example
, food such as fried chicken, chocolates, hamburgers, chips has high levels of This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :chubby
fatThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
companymainly
responsible for such ailments as obesity, blood pressure, and diabetes in kids. Thus
, getting rid of these advertisements is the best solution.In addition
, This words can be replaced with:a number of
someThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisescorporations
companiesThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
useAs a result
of these commercial strategies, This words can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
manyThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
purchaseFor instance
, a survey conducted by parents association head in Canada states that This words can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
manyThis words can be replaced with:tiny
littleThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchase
buyHence
, banning this kind of advertisements will be the correct solution to protect our children from negative adverts.In conclusion
, this kind of industry publicity on products has more negative progress than This words can be replaced with:beneficial
positiveThis words can be replaced with:therefore
SoThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
agreeThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritypublic authority
governmentdirectly
targeted This words can be replaced with:tiny
little6.5
Total Band
7
Coherence and Cohesion
5.5
Lexical Resource
6
Grammatical Range
7
Task Achievement