some people believe that advertisements targeting children may have negative effects on them

Some people believe that advertisements targeting children may have negative effects on them and suggest banning such advertisements as a solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?


Some people believe that advertisements targeting children may have negative effects on them and suggest banning such advertisements as a solution.
Nowadays, advertisement is all around us and has a considerable influence on our
lives
. Although
many
older children can recognize whether
some
advertisements are misleading or not, this is not easy for young children to identify corporate strategies.
Therefore
, I
strongly
agree
that we ought to ban those adverts that are
linearly
aimed at younger generations
because
of negative impacts on kids.

Admittedly
, there are numerous points to support my view. To
begin
with, ads can bring harm to children’s health.
In other words
,
many
fast
-food industries spending billions of dollars on advertising
mostly
unhealthy products to children every year.
For example
, food such as fried chicken, chocolates, hamburgers, chips has high levels of
fat
and sugar elements which causes child obesity. To finish, These Commercial
company
's promotions were
mainly
responsible for such ailments as obesity, blood pressure, and diabetes in kids.
Thus
, getting rid of these advertisements is the best solution.

In addition
,
some
advertising
companies
hire celebrities or
use
kid’s favorite cartoon characters as advertising strategies to promote their useless products to children.
As a result
of these commercial strategies,
many
younger generations may urge parents to
purchase
unnecessary items, such as expensive toys, the latest electronic devices.
For instance
, a survey conducted by parents association head in Canada states that
many
little
children pester their parents to
buy
the products advertised on TV and social media.
Hence
, banning this kind of advertisements will be the correct solution to protect our children from negative adverts.

In conclusion
, this kind of industry publicity on products has more negative progress than
positive
.
So
, I completely
agree
that the
government
should regulate useless showcase products or ban them, which
directly
targeted
little
children.

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