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worldThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seenHence
, it has made them lethargic and restricted from interacting with others. I This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
thinkTo
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beginThis words can be replaced with:merely
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makesFurthermore
, people feel this activity as a relaxing activity and This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
usedThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accentuate
stressMoreover
, when people watch shows for long time, they surrounded themselves with the imaginations of shows especially
children and youngsters. They are mentally Consider using a past participle here: "indulged".indulged
indulgeThis words can be replaced with:earthnaturestaruniversecreation
worlddirectly
impairs their physical and mental growth. Even in A determiner is probably missing here: "the worst".the worst
worstrather
than to have This words can be replaced with:a number of
someBesides
this, Due to introduction of reality shows, premiere of A determiner is probably missing here: "the latest".the latest
latestThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reside
liveIn conclusion
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worldThis words can be replaced with:on the contrary
butbe controlled
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so5.5
Total Band
5
Coherence and Cohesion
5.5
Lexical Resource
6.5
Grammatical Range
5.5
Task Achievement