The line graph below gives the information about the number of university graduates(males and females) in Canada from the year 1992 to 2007.
number of females and males graduated in the year 2007 nearly 150000 and 100000
graduating increased. From 1995 is an up and down of the male graduates till 2000. From 2001 the males graduating increasing. in 2007 graduates from Canadian universities reached nearly to 100000.
Females graduating from universities are always high when compared to males. than those of males graduating in 2007. Females graduating from Canadian universities are always greater than or nearly 100000 from 1992 to 2004. In 2007 the females graduating from universities reached nearly 150000.
Overall
, females are high in doing their university graduation in Canadian universities than males from 1992 to 2007. A determiner is probably missing here: "the Highest".The Highest
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studentsrespectively
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, in 1992 the number of male graduates are 70000 and later on in the next
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studentsDid you mean "there"?there
theirThis words can be replaced with:undergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
studentsThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :embarked on the proccess of
startedDid you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Finally,
FinallyFemales graduating from
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differentInitially
in 1992 females graduating are Use "higher" to make a comparison with this adjective.higher
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Total Band
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Coherence and Cohesion
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Lexical Resource
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Grammatical Range
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Task Achievement