the fact that enormous sums are paid for pieces of art is not acceptable at a time when many

The fact that enormous sums are paid for pieces of art is not acceptable at a time when many people around the world live in poverty.


The fact that enormous sums are paid for pieces of art is not acceptable at a time when many people around the world live in poverty.
It is true that pieces of art in
today
’s
world
can
change
hands for enormous sums. Works by artists such as Picasso, da Vinci and Rembrandt have
been sold
for millions of dollars. Recently, a Modigliani
was sold
to a billionaire for one hundred and seventy million dollars. It
certainly
seems obscene that such figures are spent when
many
people around the
world
live in poverty.

The work of
many
charities would
be transformed
by the money generated by
just
one of these art sales and in turn, the lives of ordinary people in need would
be transformed
. Medicines, food and shelter amongst other things could
easily
be provided
, saving lots of lives,
many
of which would be children. When the issue
is looked
at from this point of view, the art sales
world
certainly
seems obscene.

However
, in my opinion, things are unlikely to
change
. Human greed is endemic and people who have the drive to earn that amount of money and who actually have access to these sums in cash are not
often
people who will part with their wealth. Lots of prosperous people support
many
charities,
but
it is unlikely that they would completely relinquish their access to the luxuries that accompany their lives. The works of art are
also
often
seen
as investments in themselves, to
be held
on to for a period of time and then resold at a profit.

In conclusion
, in an ideal
world
, the vast sums of money that are spent on fine and rare works of art would be better spent on helping those in need. In reality,
however
, this is unlikely to take place.

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