Water pollution occurs when harmful microorganisms and chemicals
are released
into the water. Even if there are This words can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
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emissionedThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :preclude
preventIn the initial effect of water pollution, due to that most industries throw away their rubbish such as metal, iron, chemical substances etc into the sea, lake and rivers. In the age of technology
This words can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
becauseare wasted
directly
into the water or buried into the soil. Nature can not absorb these materials thus
the This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
onlyThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demolishesruins
destroysis thrown
away into water. For instance
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CaprioThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratesportraysindicatesdisplays
showsThis words can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
manyThe proper noun "United States" needs to be capitalized.United States
United statesIn addition
, construction sewage, pharmaceutical and food waste, and clothing rubbish are incinerated
and then dumped into the water, causing water pollution. This can further
adversely
affect the health of the person using the water.The governments
This words can be replaced with:ought to
have tobe involved
in tackling this issue. When the governments impose the tax, the industries will decline their waste for high profit. Whereas if they waste more rubbish, they will give more tax to the government, in result there will be opportunities which are recycling the waste and purifying the water from taxation. This will This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alleviate
reduceIn brief
, waste of the biggest industries affects the This words can be replaced with:hugeenormousgiganticvast
bigDid you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Thus,
ThusThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :terminateceasediscontinue
stop6
Total Band
6
Coherence and Cohesion
5
Lexical Resource
6.5
Grammatical Range
6.5
Task Achievement